The Safety Gnomeby *Kr3id

Flash / Animations

Managed to finish this ahead of schedule! It'll be updated in the next few days with a new set of lines for the girl.
After 3 weeks of staying up til' silly in the morning I finally finished this in time!
For my University work I was entered into a Leeds student competition to create a short film for the Knowledge Project.
When public voting opens I'd REALLY appreciate it if you voted for this entry, I put a lot of work into it!
Voices by:
RedHarvest - Thug
SnowFender - Student
Omahdon - Safety Gnome

Also, critique would REALLY be appreciated!

Critique by *FrostDrive Feb 4, 2012, 6:38:31 PM

Overall it was pretty magnificent.

Some things I thought could be added is sound effects of the gnome, like when he lands on the girls shoulders, there could be a Bloop sound or something, and when he jumps of her shoulders, there could be a swoosh sound, and when he's swinging the rope there could be a sound for that too.

Also, when the bird moves a little once it goes on screen, perhaps you could put a chirp sound?

And when he lands on her shoulders and he says EEEEEE. and then she says Uhhh..maybe be should say EEEE again, before she says "And who are you?"

Also, when the guy awkwardly steps away, a few footsteps sounds would be nice.

The only thing that's odd to me is how the girls holding her arms straight out the whole time. but I doubt anyone else will really pay that much attention to notice it.

ALSO, I thought. At the end after the website thing.
You could show the girl with a gun shooting at the sky, and the gnome falls and she takes the wallet back. because I'm thinking that'd make a lot of people laugh, and if you leave off on a laughing note that might give you a better edge for the competition.

What do you think?

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